Tuesday, 12 May 2015

Paragraph writing- Man in Space

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. 
We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.

Man in space.jpg
A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milkyway. He bounces across the stars to his rocket ship. He had a great walk out in space.

When he got to his ship he saw a strange looking thing he said “what is that? Oh it’s an alien.”

As the alien was looking at the human the human was jumping as fast as he could but the alien was just standing there. the human looked back at the alien.The alien had humongous! eye’s and had a green face.

The human was scared.But he was not scared of the alien because he thought that was an scary thing.but it’s just an alien.      


  1. Hi memory,

    It me Latu I like your work that you have done today I hope you keep on writing more and more writing like that's one you written all ready for people to see .
    From your friend Latu Misa

  2. by kei
    wall done memory your writing is amazing. keep it up.

  3. this tills me a lot it is really good I like about all the things that you did it is really explaining :)

  4. Well Done! Memory you have an amazing story. Keep up the good work. :)

    From Teija


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